Decision
Leslie grabbed her head in her hands, tugging at her own hair as she tried to think. The noise inside her head was deafening – a million words crashed through her brain, each one clamoring to emerge as the clear answer in her mind.
“What part of ‘for better or worse’ is so damn hard for you to understand?” Peter’s voice sliced through her indecision. “If this is worse, I’ll still take it,” he said, “and I’d like for you to stop second-guessing yourself – stop second-guessing us – and choose to believe me.”
Without a word, Leslie took Peter’s hand.
(Want to know more about Leslie and Peter? Read their story here and here.)
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This week I’m writing a mash-up in response to TWO prompts.
The Six Sentence Stories challenge, hosted by Denise at Girlie on the Edge, challenges writers to spin a tale in just six sentences.
This week’s cue: NOISE. Click on the link right here to join us, read some great stories, and link up to share your own!
The Flash Fiction Challenge, hosted by lead buckaroo Charli Mills at Carrot Ranch, challenges writers to spin a tale in just 99 words.
This week’s prompt: write a story in which a character takes charge. Who is this character, and what situation calls for their action? It can be playful or serious, fantastical, or realistic. Go where the prompt leads! Click on the link here to join us, read some stories and find out how to share your own!
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Timely reminder! ❤
Never a bad idea, right? Thanks for reading, Liz!
err (maybe its the post-modern standards of relationships in me), but I’m thinking, ‘As long as Miz Leslie is comfortable with someone else determining how she feels… she and Peter will be a totally happy couple. After all 1 + .89.4 = equals a couple, right?
;p
Well done on the story. Engaging characters with a dilemma and a resolution(ette).
Funny thing, this creating (or, as I prefer, discovering) characters… I mean, sure, they can’t talk out loud (at least, not when there are others around.) But we are responsible for them… as much as any translator.
That said, and though I don’t have experience with translating from one language to another, there cannot help be an element of choice on the part of the one doing the translation…..
Here I go again! Off on a tangent about ‘the process’. Your Sixes are good entertainment as well as opportunities to look at the writing thing.*
* technical term in rhetoric, CMOS refers to it as “…coming up with stories and such.“
Does CMOS really say “coming up with stories and such”??? *goes to shelf to look*
Thanks, Clark. I kind of wanted to wrap up these two and the Carrot Ranch prompt was what got me thinking about these two more than our SSS cue. Putting them together worked for me. Now I can move on to hearing what some other characters might have to say.
And you know what? I kind of hate Leslie. LOL
Verry good, the most annoying conversations I have are with myself. I can be an idiot sometimes!! I like this post!
Thanks, Paul. Don’t we all? 😀
OK. Hold it right there. Peter is a total A-hole. Really, lol. The “what part of” line should have been enough for Leslie. Nothing to think about. Done and done.
Isn’t writing magical 😀
That cracked me up, Denise. 🤣🤣🤣
Listen to your gut feelings on this one, Leslie, and walk away, far, far away. You deserve better than this. If he is this controlling now, it will only be worse after you are married.
Thank you for a SSS, where we were able to get wrapped up in this intense moment in time.
Controlling – interesting take on him, Pat. I don’t know if I would have gone that way, but now I’m going to go look again.
Hi lisa!!!!!
Im mixed on what she should do but just the fact that I am means that’s a pretty good piece of writing!
Hi, Zoe!!!
Nothing pleases me more than when my words make people think. Woot! And your feedback is always something I value a great deal. xo
I’ve read all three and I’m not really sure how I feel about these two, but I do like all 3 posts about them.
Thanks, Susan. Maybe the truth is that these two don’t even know how they feel about themselves.
Not so sure how i feel about Peter, he seems controlling. Will have to read your other stories.
Enjoy!
Okay, went back and read them. She wants a guarantee, and he wants her to quit thinking. It all sounds wrong. Well written on your part, but wrong, if you get my meaning.
Relationships are always complicated, no matter what. These two are no different.
Hands touched meaning a real connection can not mean more than the now. Excellent six!
Thanks, Lisa.
Hmmm. She’s come to a decision. But what is it?
I leave interpretation in the mind of the reader. 😉