Weekend Business

Weekend Business

June 7, 2017 Off By Lisa

Gail signed the document, then locked and patted her briefcase.

“Business awaits. Will you be OK this weekend?”

Recalling the suspicious “business” charges on their Visa statement, she imagines how Rich’s face will look later when the card is declined.

With a dismissive wave, Gail smiles. “I’m sure I will.”

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A bit of an update…

Unfortunately, my post somehow ended up reverting to an earlier version so what appears above is missing the word “hand,” and thus is not eligible for voting on the microprose grid. Bummer. The version below is what should have appeared here. Just for posterity’s sake.

Gail signed the document with a steady hand, then locked her briefcase.

“Business awaits,” he said. “You’ll be OK this weekend?”

Recalling the suspicious “business” charges on their Visa statement, she imagines Rich’s face later when the card is declined.

With a dismissive wave, Gail smiles. “I’m sure I will.”

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This post was written for the YeahWrite Microprose Challenge #321.

The prompt: “Give us your best microprose using the word “hand,” in exactly 50 words.

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About The Author

Lisa A. Listwa is a self-employed writer with experience in education, publishing, and the martial arts. Believing there was more to life than punching someone else’s time clock and inspired by the words of Henry David Thoreau, she traded her life as a high school educator for a life as a writer and hasn’t looked back. She is mother to one glorious handful of a daughter, wife to the nicest guy on the planet, and reluctant but devoted owner of three Rotten Cats. You can find her adventures and thoughts on living life deliberately here on the blog.

10 Comments

  • Sara says:
    June 7, 2017 at 2:18 pm

    Rich deserved it for all the fishy business he was in.Clever story,Lisa!

  • Rachel A. Hanson says:
    June 7, 2017 at 2:53 pm

    I am laughing at Rich so hard right now!

  • saroful says:
    June 7, 2017 at 7:40 pm

    Looks like you had just enough room to line up the tension between what Gail says and her behind-the-scenes actions! The tense shift in the middle and the first dialogue not being flagged make the piece wander a little more than it needs to between beginning and end.

    • Lisa says:
      June 7, 2017 at 10:21 pm

      Yeah, I definitely wanted – and did have – that dialogue marked. For some reason, what you’ve read here is an earlier draft of the story and not my final. I honestly have no idea why it reverted. Oh, well. Thanks for your comments.

  • Sageleaf says:
    June 8, 2017 at 3:52 pm

    Fun story! And sounds like it has a looong history of marital…problems. Haha. And sorry the “hand” version didn’t make it to the publish screen, but…we all enjoyed it! 🙂

    • Lisa says:
      June 8, 2017 at 4:35 pm

      Thanks, sweets! Yeah, I have no idea what happened. Oh, well.
      Got the coloring book just now and your lovely note. <3 We will have fun coloring and being peaceful (I need that right now).

  • dyannedillon says:
    June 8, 2017 at 10:23 pm

    Love this, Lisa! Ol’ Rich is getting what he deserves!

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